Rewrite the following paragraph to correct the shifts in pronoun number and person. There are five mistakes. (You do not need to rewrite the paragraph if you do not want to, just tell me where the errors are.)

Although we have been able to talk to most of our students, there are a few you haven't been able to talk to yet. It is important to recognize that the students should be able to depend on her family. However, the school is a place of trust for many of these students. We have to keep asking questions about what the best programs would be for them. A student can learn to develop different tastes for their growth. As teachers, you cannot spend time on only a single topic. We have to be more creative! It is time for the individual teacher to stand up for the creativity of his students!

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Kayley Cabrera

2 June, 12:42

Rewrite the following paragraph to correct the shifts in pronoun number and person. There are five mistakes. (You do not need to rewrite the paragraph if you do not want to, just tell me where the errors are.)

Although we have been able to talk to most of our students, there are a few you haven't been able to talk to yet. It is important to recognize that the students should be able to depend on her family. However, the school is a place of trust for many of these students. We have to keep asking questions about what the best programs would be for them. A student can learn to develop different tastes for their growth. As teachers, you cannot spend time on only a single topic. We have to be more creative! It is time for the individual teacher to stand up for the creativity of his students!

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Marisol Mcmillan · Answer 1

Although we have been able to talk to most of our students, there are a few we haven't been able to talk to yet. It is important to recognize that the students should be able to depend on their family. However, the school is a place of tryst for many of these students. We have to keep asking questions about what the best programs would be for them. A student can learn to develop different tastes for their growth. As teachers, we cannot spend time on only a single topic. We have to be more creative! It is time for the us to stand up for the creativity of their students.

Sheldon Mcclain · Answer 2

Error #1: " Although we have been able to talk to most of our students, there are a few you haven't been able to talk to yet."

Correction: " Although we have been able to talk to most of our students, there are a few we haven't been able to talk to yet."

Explanation - the pronoun shifted from second person plural ("we" to second person singular ("you") in the original incorrect sentence. In the correction, I made sure there was no shift in the pronoun number, and that it was consistently in second person plural.

Error#2: " It is important to recognize that the students should be able to depend on her family."

Correction: "It is important to recognize that the students should be able to depend on their family."

Explanation: In the original sentence, the pronoun shifted from third person plural ("they") to third person singular ("her"). In the correction, I made sure there was no shift in the pronoun number, and that it was consistently in third person plural.

Error#3: " A student can learn to develop different tastes for their growth."

Correction: " A student can learn to develop different tastes for his or her growth."

Explanation: In the original sentence, the pronoun shifted from third person singular ("a student") to third person plural ("their"). In the correction, I made sure there was no shift in the pronoun number, and that it was consistently in third person singular.

Error#4: " As teachers, you cannot spend time on only a single topic."

Correction: " As teachers, we cannot spend time on only a single topic."

Explanation: In the original sentence, the pronoun number shifted from a plural pronoun ("teachers") to singular pronoun ("you"). In the correction, I made sure there was no shift in pronoun number, and that it consistently comprised of plural pronouns.

Error#5: " It is time for the individual teacher to stand up for the creativity of his students"

Correction: "It is time for individual teachers to stand up for the creativity of their students"

Explanation: The corrected sentence fits in better and consistently with the rest of the paragraph since the subjects in question are teachers and students (plural), not a singular teacher or student. Therefore, I corrected "the individual teacher" to "individual teachers" and "his students" to "their students" so that the pronoun number is consistent.

Rewritten paragraph (with corrections in bold):

" Although we have been able to talk to most of our students, there are a few we haven't been able to talk to yet. It is important to recognize that the students should be able to depend on their family. However, the school is a place of trust for many of these students. We have to keep asking questions about what the best programs would be for them. A student can learn to develop different tastes for his or her growth. As teachers, we cannot spend time on only a single topic. We have to be more creative! It is time for individual teachers to stand up for the creativity of their students!