Excerpt from Home Emergencies

Carole Jenkins

(6) Suggestions for things to include in the chest are

Emergency telephone numbers (such as 911, police, fire, doctors, poison control, relatives, and neighbors)

Information relating to the health needs and medications of family members

A first-aid kit

A battery operated radio

A fire extinguisher

A hot water bottle

An ice pack

Which is the BEST revision for sentence 6?

A)

These are important items to include in the chest:

Some things that you should probably include in your chest:

I can suggest the many things that you should include in your chest:

D)

The following list contains suggestions for what to include in the chest:

The best revision for sentence 6 is, The following list contains suggestions for what to include in the chest:

Answer: Option D.

Explanation:

While revising any sentence, we have to make sure that the alteration conveys the same information without changing its meaning. The best possible revision for the given sentence would be, 'The following list contains suggestions for what to include in the chest:' Here we can see the revision conveys the same message as it was before.

The other mentioned option such as A and B couldn't be the best revision mainly because rather than suggesting, those sentences are stating the list. Similarly, option C starts with a first person singular pronoun, which lessens the possibility of best revision.