What is the best way to revise the paragraph to create

sentence variety?

What is the best way to revise the paragraph to

effectively use transitions?

Answer: In general, use sentences of different lengths. Also consider moving adverbs or adverb clauses from the end of a sentence to the beginning.

For transitions, think about the relationship between ideas. Is it a time sequence? Use words like first, then, after that, finally. If it's logic, use words like because, since this ... then that. Or therefore, as a result.