I wrote this poem and it needs to be dark. Is it dark enough?

It's called "Falling into Loneliness"

Why are you doing this to me?

Dark black screaming ghosts

seeping in through every hole

Icy droplets freezing as the fate that brought me here to this place of Forever emptiness

My very breath is taken from me to wander alone forever in the empty barren space of loneliness.

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Cristopher Watson

1 October, 18:06

I wrote this poem and it needs to be dark. Is it dark enough?

It's called "Falling into Loneliness"

Why are you doing this to me?

Dark black screaming ghosts

seeping in through every hole

Icy droplets freezing as the fate that brought me here to this place of Forever emptiness

My very breath is taken from me to wander alone forever in the empty barren space of loneliness.

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Justice Casey · Answer 1

It is dark enough, I love the title and how you wrote it, the structure of the poem is written beautifully, the ending was perfect, this poem made me feel" different emotions".